at home with ann

A Story In Haiku

Posted on: 17 April 2007

I love this form… I make no claims to having any flair,
certainly not compared to others around these parts.
He taught me everything I know.

I appreciate I digress totally from its original intent,
but with poetic licence and a lot of chutzpah, I wish to
attempt a silly story…

… it may go something like this


Getting to know him
Eyes lock across the table
Feel salad in teeth

I’m a lucky sod
Never thought she would agree
Come on date with me

Powder room beckons
Spend penny, fix hair, fix teeth
That’s better go back

What’s taking her time
Ah she’s back looking divine
Pour another glass

Share bottle of wine
Feeling flushed and words slurring
First impression counts

She’s a right cracker
Must make a good impression
Maybe go dancing

Chat over coffee
Conversation light breezy
Wonders what he thinks

Penny for her thoughts
Can’t read her like open book
What do I do now

Tuck cold hand in his
Automatic reaction
It’s cold out tonight

This looks promising
Gives her hand a gentle squeeze
Maybe in with chance

Perfect gentleman
Knows how to treat a lady
Takes no advantage

Wonders if she will
We could go back to my place
Some girls do first date

Drives me safely home
Goodnight thank you kiss on cheek
Would you like coffee

Coffee and… breakfast?
Red fingerprints mark my cheek
Not that kinda gal

Too good to be true
Thought this one was different
Men are all the same

copyright 2007 ann raven


7 Responses to "A Story In Haiku"

flowers next morning
card professes his remorse
too much drink taken

Love it Ann, great fun, and I think the form follows function; or something like that.

Love you. 🙂

taken by surprise
maybe overreacted
give him second chance

second date cautious
nervous smiles cold hands touching
take a chance is hard

he is rather cute
look into twinkling brown eyes
trying hard to please

I love this!

Haiku are so fun
And to constuct a story!
Maybe I’ll try, too

OK whats the rest of the story:)

What fun. It was Haiku that brought me to loving verse as a child, but I have not played with it in ages. Your words make me think it’s time to begin again.


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April 2007
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